Check out these two poems by first-time submitter Luke B. Thanks for sending in your poems and keep up the great work! In the deep The ocean is deep but my thoughts are deeper down in the cold wet and dark water shout for help no one will hear you no one will see you no one will save you you are alone in the deep water can't see anything life flashing before your eyes freezing hurting in the deep I'm thinking absolute nothingness crawling into a black hole lying in a field of wheat alone isolated from the rest of the world by myself on a far away planet on the dark side of the moon just waiting for something to happen i click my pen i write i'm thinking i'm thinking i'm thinking just seeing what will happen i'm thinking
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Lucy H.
1/24/2019 06:58:51 pm
I loved how the two poems where pretty much about the same thing, yet you managed to make each unique and similar at the same time. I really enjoyed these poems!
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Luke Bone
2/7/2019 09:56:29 am
Thank you I worked really hard on those.
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Yared Mckaughan
4/3/2019 08:01:28 am
DUDE, this is really deep ( no pun intended ) it sounds like if you're talking about paranoia or drowning.
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Rex Collins
4/5/2019 08:10:43 am
Both poems were really detailed with lots of imagery and I could really imagine it
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Meggggg
8/28/2019 12:59:00 pm
Ok I don't know why, but i just really loved that. Thanks
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Cypress Guillory
8/29/2019 07:12:01 am
I really like the first poem it has very good imagery
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Delphi Allen
11/21/2019 06:53:10 am
I also like the imagery in the first poem and the mood of it as well
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Marylins Pineda
8/29/2019 07:16:11 am
That was rlly rlly good
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